A Carnival Darkly

Here is a paragraph from my first attempt at a novel. I failed to finish more than a chapter, but after finding and reading what i wrote I realized that at least some of it was pretty cool. Observe:

Before entering in the Alameda County Fair one must understand the word "gloaming." Gloaming’s are an overwhelming feeling of dread that something horrible is about to happen. They can be felt in horror movies before all the action and violence occur. Its not exactly foreshadowing, but the prickles on your screaming dates shoulder because of the eerie music-that’s a gloaming. So how do you incorporate the feeling of impeccable doom with the fun of a Ferris wheel and cotton candy? Take one step inside and close your eyes. Now take a deep breath and smell the air. Your next move will be a cough, and if you have allergies something worse. It’s not the pollen that got you. It’s the smell that you’re about to be had. It’s the dirt, cow shit and the germs of a fifty-year-old walking dead carne being forced into your lungs. Its not that it smells bad; most can’t put a finger on why it’s different. But, there is no doubt your subconscious will know. Now it’s only a matter of time before you shiver.